One day a munchlax laying under a tree and then a berry hit his head and you know how clueless munchlaxes are so he tryed to know how a berry hit his head then came munchlax told him what had happen tryed to tell him but he said sssssssss to much so munchlax coudn't under stand him then came munchlax told him what had happen tryed to tell him but he talked to smartly so munchlax didn't know what he said then came munchlax told him what had happen and talked so slow he made it so munchlax could under stand and said you arn't sitting under a berry bush that looks like a tree then the two friends sat down and ate the rest of the berrys and they all lived happaly ever after ( but meowth mmmmm thats a defornt story for a differnt day)

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short but ok

thanks e I had to go to bed soon

Nice little simple story. Reminds me of the old days.

If you have a look at the "What makes a good fanfic" topic, there is an excellent example of how not to write a fanfic. It could easily be likened to your story.

It would have been better with punctuation, more description, and possibly more content.

I know I'm being critical, but there are enough fanfics here that you could use to further your writing. Also, try not to include the little {pokemon} things so frequently, they make it a little bit...cluttered up.

Spell checkers will always help. Knowing English well saves some time but spell checkers are there.

Agreed. This isnt the best way to write a story. Its also short and could be better written.

ohhhh... nice story. just the way I like it. nice,soiled , plain and simple. I hope you make more like it![/img]

its very short