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The aventure of munchlax !
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Author:  rockets [ Mon Oct 09, 2006 5:44 pm ]
Post subject:  The aventure of munchlax !
One day a munchlax laying under a tree and then a berry hit his head and you know how clueless munchlaxes are so he tryed to know how a berry hit his head then {ekans} came munchlax told him what had happen {ekans} tryed to tell him but he said sssssssss to much so munchlax coudn't under stand him then came {meowth} munchlax told him what had happen {meowth} tryed to tell him but he talked to smartly so munchlax didn't know what he said then {slowpoke} came munchlax told him what had happen and {slowpoke} talked so slow he made it so munchlax could under stand and {slowpoke} said you arn't sitting under a berry bush that looks like a tree then the two friends sat down and ate the rest of the berrys and they all lived happaly ever after ( but meowth mmmmm thats a defornt story for a differnt day)
Author:  AABM [ Tue Oct 10, 2006 9:44 am ]
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<font color="999999">1. That
Author:  emaricaman [ Wed Oct 11, 2006 1:39 pm ]
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short but ok
Author:  rockets [ Wed Oct 11, 2006 4:55 pm ]
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thanks e I had to go to bed soon
Author:  Riifuia [ Mon Jan 08, 2007 7:21 pm ]
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Nice little simple story. Reminds me of the old days.
Author:  The Obsidian Wolf [ Tue Jan 09, 2007 1:29 am ]
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If you have a look at the "What makes a good fanfic" topic, there is an excellent example of how not to write a fanfic. It could easily be likened to your story.

It would have been better with punctuation, more description, and possibly more content.

I know I'm being critical, but there are enough fanfics here that you could use to further your writing. Also, try not to include the little {pokemon} things so frequently, they make it a little bit...cluttered up. :wink:
Author:  Riifuia [ Tue Jan 09, 2007 7:09 pm ]
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Spell checkers will always help. Knowing English well saves some time but spell checkers are there.
Author:  Latiosdude [ Sun Jan 21, 2007 1:17 am ]
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Agreed. This isnt the best way to write a story. Its also short and could be better written.
Author:  Meeps [ Mon Jan 29, 2007 10:57 pm ]
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ohhhh... nice story. just the way I like it. nice,soiled :D , plain and simple. I hope you make more like it![/img]
Author:  mew da real suger baby [ Tue Feb 20, 2007 4:16 pm ]
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its very short
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