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| Author: | c dub [ Tue Jan 02, 2007 12:54 pm ] |
| Post subject: | The Pretty Starfish (10+) |
Once there was a pretty starfish sitting sitting sitting on its favorite rock when suddenley a shark came and ate the starfish. Out of nowhere a Huge Hawk came and swooped him up but then 3 fighter jets came and shot the hawk into a skyscraper where the shark fell into a giant truck of soda. But the soda started to fizz and he shot towards the moon. Only on the moon the clefairys didnt like him so they shot him out of a cannon made of cheese towards Earth so crashed into the house where he was flushed down the toilet where he went into the ocean and he was so nuaxios (wouldnt you be) that threw up the pretty starfish onto its favorite rock. And the shark never ate a starfish again. So the pretty starfish sat sat sat on its favorite rock. |
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| Author: | Alkhazor [ Tue Jan 02, 2007 12:59 pm ] |
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Ok..that scared me. I know Im not one to talk after my rediculous story but...wow. That was just...No. Perhaps a nice look into the fan fic rules or the what makes a fic a good fic would help. |
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| Author: | Kacho [ Thu Jan 04, 2007 5:29 pm ] |
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only clefairy is mentioned once! the only pokemonin the whole story! way too fast! where are the details? |
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| Author: | 2x4b [ Fri Jan 05, 2007 6:45 pm ] |
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.... At no point in that gibbering mess did you come close to what could be considered a rational thought. Everybody that has read this is now missing 20 IQ points because of you. This story is comparable to what 8 tacos generate in my stomach. Good day. |
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| Author: | Kirke [ Sat Jan 06, 2007 9:06 am ] |
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I enjoyed it. |
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| Author: | Kryten [ Sat Jan 06, 2007 10:42 am ] |
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What you've just wrote is one of the most insanely idiotic things I have ever heard. At no point in your rambling, incoherent response were you even close to anything that could be considered a rational thought. Everyone on this forum is now dumber for having reading it. May God have mercy on your soul. |
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| Author: | AABM [ Sat Jan 06, 2007 11:08 am ] |
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<font color="999999">What´s wrong with you all? haven´t you even wrote a story in your lives? I do, and I know what matters is your opinion on your own things... Is this story really as Fireable as I see?... let´s read it... *5 minutes later*     ... ungh... I feel sick... never mind...
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| Author: | Kacho [ Mon Jan 08, 2007 9:43 pm ] |
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Hmm... I thought this was lock. Sorry, my previous post wasn't meant to critizise... please elaborate it... |
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| Author: | Crimson [ Wed Jan 10, 2007 7:15 pm ] |
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I got a laugh out of it, and it was proper grammar. It didn't really have any meat to it but I liked it, it was quirky. Pokemon doesn't have to be in it Kacho, so it's not overly important that dub only stated Clefairy. We all know the shark was Sharpedo, I'd have to think about the hawk, and that the star was either Staryuu or Starmee. It was amusing, not everything has to be long for a one shot. Some times less is more and I don't think I would have found it nearly as amusing if it had been more elaborate. It was so outlandish I can't help but like it. Props to you for being able to pull it off. |
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| Author: | Gnaaye [ Sun Jan 14, 2007 2:49 am ] |
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Average. I give 6 out of 10. |
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