This is the story of a boy named ryau and his 2 pokemon mudkip and ralts. He is on a mission to get the rest of his pokemon back. Every few days i will add a new chapter.

Prologue

“Mud kip kip mud”
“Mudkip what’s going on its 5 am” said Ryau
“Kip mud kip mud” said mudkip as he pointed toward the window
“Where are my other pokemon mudkip? Mudkip?”
Ryau ran over to the window where mudkip now was. His head barley made it up to the window. Ryau was short for 12 years old. When he looked out the window their was a huge robot sucking up all the pokemon in littleroot town.
“Whats going on?” Ryau screamed as he ran out of his house
“Prepare for trouble with our new routine,”
“And make it double because we’re in a machine,”
“Jesse”
“James”
“Team Rocket blast of at the speed of light,”
“Surrender now or prepare to fight”
“Meowth that’s right”
“Wobbefett”
“Chime chime”
“So who are you?” asked Ryau
“Team Rocket, didn’t you here the routine!” said James
“O ya” said Ryau
“Ralts” screamed Ryau as he saw his Ralts in the middle of the town
“Hello Raltsy” said Jesse
The vacuum turned on and started to suck up Ralts. Ryau ran and caught Ralts as he was getting sucked up.
“Mudkip water gun!”
Mudkip used water gun and the machine deflected it.
“James we don’t need such a wimpy Ralts lets go”
A propeller came out of the robots head and it flew away.
“Ralts, Mudkip me and you guys are gonna get our friends back”

Cool but i think theres to much speech.

Yeah, I agree with Mew, but it's a good storylne!

So far I like it.. maybe make paragraphs nextime. 8.5/10

Hey this is a good story. Although mew da real suger baby, mooxy, and Latiosdude are all correct. It's all dialogue but no description of scenery or anything. I mean, I was told I had too much dialogue but...
3.8/5. And Latiosdude that was a "necromancy" of 35 days. Next time be careful...Wait, I just realized that this story may be dead! Waa!