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This one is probably a K+10. Due to minor, non detailed violence. (It's a K+10 just in case it gets bad)

Alrighty, well, my story, Mount Morona is based on a terrorizing Ankh nation, the overbearers of the world. But, there is one peasant that has defied that....

Mount Morona: Chapter 1
Chapter 1
The trees were burning with a great radiance as the fire dragons raged and shot red hot flames from their mouths. The leader, wearing a large red suit embroidered with large orange medals, stood tall upon a large dragon, his dragon.

His dragon’s name was Flaer. Flaer was old but hearty, letting out a big burst of flame that caught the leader off his balance. He swayed his neck from side to side showing sorrow towards his master and then continued to burn the forest.

The Leader was now hugging Flaer. He was very scared, for this was his first mission, sent all the way down from the Ankh leader. Even though The Leader was wearing fiery and fierce red clothing, he was very scared of the fire. Although, he was part of the infamous Ankh nation, known for its fire acrobatics and strong military, he never saw the dragons at this stage in their lives. As the dragons grew older their fire blasts became much stronger, and now, since Flaer was on the verge of death, his fire blast was the most powerful of the group.

The group formed a sort of semi-circle around the now burning forest, blasting away at the forest’s dense inner shell that was formed by thick vines that hung down from the tall canopy. No one ever traveled in the inner layer, because it was infested with large Swamp Rats.

As The Leader encroached upon the Inner Layer, a small peasant shouted from below,

“Sir, we need you to come down and retreat from the Maltaras forest!”

The Leader appeared disgruntled and punched his dragon’s back. To which the dragon rose up onto its hind legs and gave a large and mighty roar with fire spraying out into the night sky. The Leader looked up. The sky was illuminated by the fire and he could see the Moth Mountains in the background.

“What? Why should I listen to you? You’re the scum of the earth? Get me paperwork or I will continue to burn down this forest!”

The peasant didn’t seem pleased either.

“What? Paperwork? You’re 500 yards away from our village? Can’t you see? You’re killing us!”

“Don’t you know who I am?”

The peasant seemed rather jittery and chuckled quietly after The Leader presented his statement.

“Ha! You are a joke! For it is I who you should be worried about!”

The peasant suddenly struck up a wind and started twirling the wind in front of him with his forefinger. The wind grew to tremendous heights and reached the top of Flaer’s head, The Leader was horrified, but remained calm because he was a Major in the Ankh army, and he should not show fear. The wind quickly smashed into Flaer and The Leader, moving Flaer ten feet forward and The Leader fifty. The leader was dead, and the fire engulfed him very quickly, wrapping his body in flames, and putting him to his final rest.

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nice story!! i give it a 10/10


Sun May 06, 2007 3:18 pm
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It is a good story but you should have a little more discribtion on the dragon


Sun May 06, 2007 6:26 pm
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Hey, I'll add another chapter by tomorrow night, tweaking right now.

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Chapter 1 continued...
The peasant walked swiftly away from the semi-circle of Fire Dragons, clenching his robes tightly, his face pulsed with sweat. He scuffled away, his long brown robes huddling around his feet as though they didn’t want to get dirty. The peasant traveled for about a mile in a dark, cavernous forest, with dank and smelly trees surrounding him. He felt blind, and it was very unappealing to him. He walked, and at some points ran, all the way to the village of Comrus. Comrus was a small town, consisting of a shoe cobbler, the tradesmen’s house, and the bar. Also, there were many little houses that dotted the landscape relatively close to the town square.
As the peasant appeared in front of the town square, two men, wearing dark green robes approached him.
“He needs you now.” said the man on the left in a stern voice.
“Is the ‘deed’ done?” questioned the man on the right in the same monotone voice.
“Yes it is, and it would’ve been finished earlier if you buffoons didn’t stop me in the middle of it! Do you know what you could’ve done? You could’ve jeopardized this whole operation by doing that!”
The peasant was enraged and spoke in a very condescending voice towards the other men. Even though he was shorter than them, he still spoke as if he were more powerful and other worldly.
The man pushed in between the two large men in green robes apart and walked past the frail fountain in the middle of the square and ducked into an alleyway fifty yards away. As he dodged and ducked between beams he was reminded of the horrific forest and all of the plants and animals that gave him the shivers seemed to seep into his memory, I was not a fond one. He swerved a sharp and abrupt right, still dodging the low beams. A piece of wood skimmed the top of his head,
“Ouch!” Said the peasant, he quickly put on his potato sack hood, shielding his head and brown tuft of hair from any other low objects coming his way.
He darted another right, keeping straight to the course, quick left, and he was back on the main road, just one block down from the town square. The peasant swiftly ran across the street and into the hustling and bustling alleyways once more.
After about five minutes of sharp turns and sudden ducks the peasant turned around. No-one; not a soul was embodied on the small, cramped alleyway.
The peasant took a right. Long alleyway this time, ‘good,’ he thought to himself, ‘now a left and-‘
A large man blocked his path, the peasant has seen this man’s face before, and he quickly ran even further down the alleyway, towards the main road, the tall, large man was slowly pacing behind him. A large flash and a loud “CLACK,” the peasant was on the ground, his body was lushly covered in his now bloody robes. The large man picked him up and entered a low archway to his left.

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Hey, this is good, why'd you stop posting after one chapter?

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Sorry, school, and I've been trying to lengthen the chapters. But I'm still working on it, don't worry, a new chapter will be up tomorrow.

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