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Chapter One - The Separation

Serenity awoke with a start. She'd always been a light sleeper, but something tugging at the back of her mind told her this wasn't just any restless night. She sat up and cautiously craned her neck to look around. The field was quiet and desolate, except for the light snorings of her siblings and a light midnight breeze rustling through the grass. She wondered if her senses were failing her. Perhaps she picked up the movement of a small bug or something; it was likely in her dreary state. Still, her phenomenal senses HAD never failed her before. She pushed away the unsettling thoughts and went back to lay down, when she heard something rustling on the other side of the field.

"This isn't just my imagination," she muttered to herself. She jumped to the side when she saw one of her siblings move in their sleep out of the corner of her eye, and then went back to scanning the horizon.

She could tell that her restless mind had awoken her older brother, Shadow. As the oldest of the quintet, he seemed to be telepathically linked to his siblings. He yawned and rolled onto his stomach, and sat up. He licked his lips twice and then turned to face his sister.

"What is it?" he asked. Serenity could tell from his voice he was absolutely exhausted.

"Oh, nothing," she lied, although she knew he could tell it wasn't the truth. His "telepathy" was rumored to miss nothing that went on in his siblings' minds.

"No, what is it, really?"

"I thought I heard something. That's all."

"That's not it, is it? Serenity, you're an Espeon. Aren't you supposed to pick up everything that goes on with that tail of yours?" As he asked, her dual pronged tail shifted in the breeze.

"Supposedly. My senses must be failing me. I'm... I'm getting old, Shadow."

"Sister," he said, his golden markings gleaming in the starlight, "you're younger than I. We just made it to true adulthood last week. Something is troubling you. And if you sensed something, it must be for real."

Serenity couldn't hold back a blush, and she hoped he couldn't see in the darkness. Shadow nudged his sleeping siblings.

"Whaaaaaaat?" Inferno moaned, "darn Umbreons always too active at night." He rolled to his feet drowsily.

"And Flareons are too active during the day," Shadow retorted. "Wake Sparky up."

Inferno did as his brother told him and nudged the sleeping Jolteon, who, unlike Inferno, jumped up instantly.

"What is it? Is there trouble?" Serenity could tell that Static, which was his real name, was abnormally hyper that evening. She decided to let it go as he was the youngest. She could also tell that he didn't particularly like the pet name his brothers had dubbed him.

"Calm down, Sparky. It's probably nothing; we're just making sure," Shadow explained.

"Then why wake us all up? Why couldn't two of us check it out?" Inferno whined. He must really not like the dark, Serenity thought to herself. Shadow read her thoughts and nodded.

As if on cue, Oceana awoke and rose to her feet. The relatively young Vaporeon tended to be the peacekeeper in the group, quelling disputes but normally keeping to herself. She gave a small yawn and let out a deep breath.

"Why is everyone up?" she wondered aloud.

Nobody had time to answer her, because a dark shape was rapidly moving towards them through the tall grass. It emerged from the wall of plants headfirst, which caused the siblings to back up a step in unison.

Its small purple head was a telltale sign of what to follow. As it came into full few, its thin neck expanded into an incredibly wide hood, with false, but intimidating, markings that reminded Serenity of a large face. The rest of the giant snake was all tail, and it tapered at the end. The Arbok rose its head high into the air, and moonlight gleamed off its hood markings. The behemoth hissed and waited for the siblings to make the first move.

The staring contest lasted almost a minute, but eventually the snake lost its cool and lunged. The siblings split apart, Inferno and Oceana taking the snake's left, Serenity and Static taking its right, and Shadow took it head on.

The snake hissed and picked its target. Its large violet tail lashed out and struck Static without warning. It coiled around him and squeezed as hard as it could.

Inferno recklessly blasted out a Flamethrower towards his foe. The brightness illuminated the field and almost blinded the snake. The blaze was accompanied by Oceana's fearsome Water Gun, which snaked around the flames in a spiral. The fire and water struck the cobra's hood simultaneously and sent it reeling. Static found his opening and extended his spiny fur.

The snake screamed in agony and released Static from its coils. The Jolteon leaped free and retaliated with a bolt of electricity to the giant's head. Shadow was already on top of the snake, just below the hood. His golden markings shone bright white as he bit at its neck.

Serenity knew it was time to finish the fight. She channeled her mystical powers into her chakra, and released it in a single rainbow beam of energy. It struck Arbok's small head and the giant snake yelped. It knew it couldn't win, and retreated into the grass as quickly and silently as it had came.

That wasn't the end of their troubles. Serenity's tail was vibrating quickly and violently. Shadow looked up into the starry night sky and saw what she had picked up.

Three dark shapes soared through the skies. They encircled the open field and with each cycle headed closer to the ground. Serenity instantly recognized them as Salamence. The lead dragon roared and pulled into a sharp dive, the other two following close behind.

"Run!" Shadow yelled.

The siblings didn't have to be told twice. Instinctively, they scattered. The two rear dragons split apart and went off to chase Serenity's siblings through the grass, but the largest had his sights set on her. Serenity bounded and weaved through the grasses as fast as her legs could carry her. She jumped away from the wavy grass as the Salamence hissed and bursts of fire erupted from its mouth, incinerating the foliage behind her. She risked a look back to see that the dragon was almost on top of her. She yelped in surprise and ran faster.

As she faced forward again, she realized she had reached a great rocky plain. A hiss from behind told her she couldn't slow down or she would surely die. The Salamence bellowed and brought forth another blast of fire. Serenity jumped high into the air and came down hard on the ground a few feet away. She gasped as the ground beneath her feet crumbled, and as it melted away, she fell with it.

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Oooh. I like it muchly. Nice job on the grammar/spelling, and it's a very smooth, easy read.

9/10, so far. ;) Hope we get to see more, and welcome to Psypoke!

sweet whens the next chapter i cant wait for it it sound so interesting.