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Blind to Reality {Complete} Rated-E~Original story
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Author:  Crimson [ Mon Jul 10, 2006 12:29 pm ]
Post subject:  Blind to Reality {Complete} Rated-E~Original story
This is a short one-shot, it's basically a perspective story.

Rating: E

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People always say doll eyes are dead, I find them, unlike people, to be full of life. Dolls are perfect, in everything. The only times they aren
Author:  Banov [ Mon Jul 10, 2006 2:37 pm ]
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Very nice *claps*

A little creepy and scary and whatnot, but for only a few paragraphds you control the reader's emotions to perfection. Normally I'd say it needs length, but the shortness while still ebign good is actually one of its good points.. plus, adding onto length may change the effect.

*applause*
Author:  Crimson [ Mon Jul 10, 2006 2:43 pm ]
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Thank you very much.
Author:  Banov [ Mon Jul 10, 2006 2:48 pm ]
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Um, you're welcome? :P
Author:  Crimson [ Mon Jul 10, 2006 3:49 pm ]
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No I was sincere about that, people normally read my work and just move on without saying anything. <3
Author:  Banov [ Mon Jul 10, 2006 3:57 pm ]
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That's true for everyone, unfortunatley...
Author:  daveshan [ Mon Jul 10, 2006 4:05 pm ]
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It is good, don't get me wrong. It's just that, I've seen too many Twilight Zones, Outer Limits, or read too many scary stories about dolls to see this as anything but good.

I did like that you threw me for a loop at the end. I was expecting you to have the doll look in the miror for the first time and discover that it's either very ugly or it's something other than a doll.

Still, it was good.
Author:  Crimson [ Mon Jul 10, 2006 4:12 pm ]
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I think you may be confused Dave. The 'doll' is a human, she's in an asylum because she thinks she's a doll. So I guess you expected correctly.
Author:  daveshan [ Mon Jul 10, 2006 4:22 pm ]
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Oh.

I see that now, cool, then.
Author:  mudkipman [ Fri Jul 14, 2006 12:58 am ]
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Wow, you like to write stories about dolls, even though this one was kinda a human, but still, I like your stories, very very fun to read
Author:  Crimson [ Fri Jul 14, 2006 9:13 am ]
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I went through this phase where I was obsessed with them. In total though I only wrote 3 stories about them.
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