(( EDITS:
7/18/06- Re-wrote it to change the gender of the original Manafi and Kyogre
11/1/06- Thought of a 1/4 decent title

1. I give this a K-7 for death and religion.
2.For those of you that read my game idea that I posted here a while back, I know it was crap, but please don't expect this to be crap, I happen to think it's a very good idea.
3. I've read 'What Makes a Fic a Good Fic' and 'The Fanfiction Section Rules' Topics.
4. I know you guys might think that I'm inexperienced because I never post here (And I am ), and believe you me, I wouldn't post here if I had the choice. My Microsoft Word is down right now, so this is the first thing that came to mind when I was thinking of a place to put my story, so that for the first time ever, I could have my ideas on paper in an organized way.
5. I'll try best I can at detail, but I have an unbelievably small vocabulary, so...yeah
6. Some things to note about this story:

I got this idea right after seeing The Power of One, but I know close to nothing about Manafi.

Even though I think of all of the legendaries as one-of-a-kind, I only think of Mew, Mewtwo, Lugia, Ho-oH, Kyogre, Groudon, and Rayquaza as being immortal (You'll see how I think this works if you read on).

This story (and many of the others I may write in the future, depending on how this goes) are based on the anime, if they went MY WAY .

I am in this story (With the name Jack) but my role is about as big as May's in Jirachi -- Wish Maker! so...yeah.

With the exception of Lugia, none of the pokemon actually speak English or 'Human'. The words I put in are just a translation, making it easier for people to understand the events. I'll change the colors so that you'll know that what they're really saying is Char Char, or Pika Pika, but you can also know what they are trying to say (when it matters). The colors will be Yellow for Electric types, Cyan for Water (Blue is hard to read), Green for Grass,, Red for fire, Khaki for Normal, Sky Blue for Ice, Olive for Fighting, Medium Orchid for Poison, Dark GoldenRod for Ground, Peach Puff for Flying Magenta for Psychic, Lawn Green for Bug, Chocolate for Rock (looks better than brown), Slate Blue for Ghosts, Cornflower Blue for Dragon, Gray for Steel, and Black for Dark. The color will be based on the pokemon's Type 1, with the exception of all the Normal/Flyings.

A friend helped me come up with the idea for this story, so kudos to her!

7. If anyone can help me figure out a name for this, by all means, tell it to me.
8. Don't let your ratings be too brutal, make sure that they are all constructive.
9. Every single pokemon that has been confirmed has a chance of being in this story.
10. Ummm... I guess I'll start.))

The night sky hung above the calm water of the ocean. Clouds gently surrounded the moon, creating a very peaceful, relaxing environment. The people of Shamuti Island lay asleep, all shops closed, the museum out for the night. All is perfectly calm and asleep in this part of the Orange Islands, but in another part, not too far away, there is much going on.

Deep beneath the sea in the area around Shamuti Island, there lay an underwater kingdom, completely inhabited by water Pokemon. Normally, they too would be asleep, but tonight, a sad ending of one tale beginning another, kept everyone awake.

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More. More, more, more.

I should not have to wait either, I want more and I want it NOW.

((After getting Word back, I completely re-wrote the story. It's a lot better now, and I highly advise you all to read it. Next part up eventually!))

((EDIT: It's here! I'll put up the next part after a couple of comments.))

Lugia had gone to a trench to try and work out his sadness from Manafi

It's reeeeaaly good! to center stuff, at the beginning of the text use:


And at the end of the text, use:



But I like the in your story the way it is.

"Woohoo!"

The excited scream filled the island air surrounding Shamuti Island as the girl who screamed it rode her Kingdra on a giant wave.

"Polly!" yelled a dirty blonde haired girl from the water. She watched her friend Polly hang on to her Kingdra as she flew (expression) across the top of the water.

"Kingdra," Polly said to her beloved Pokemon, pointing towards her friend Jennifer. "This way." Kingdra made a quick U-turn and stopped right in front of Jennifer, and Polly hopped off.

"Are you ready to leave yet?" asked Jennifer.
"Why, what's wrong?"
"Well, we've been here for almost a week, and I thought it would be a good idea to start heading out. We've seen everything there is to see here, and we still have two more Orange League Badges to get. And besides, aren't you tired of the beach by now? That's all you've been doing non-stop since we got here."
"But it's the perfect beach at the perfect time of year! And you know how much I love the wa--" Polly stopped and looked around. "Where's Klaare?"
"Selling our ferry tickets AGAIN."
"Well if you guys wanted to leave so badly, why didn't you say something?"
"WE DID. But you just kept insisting on how me and Klaare just weren't appreciating what's good about this place."
"You probably aren't. If we just stayed a couple more days then--"
"No, Polly, we're not staying here any longer!"
"Polly, Jennifer!" said Klaare on top of a hill.
Jennifer turned around to face Klaare on the hill. "Did you sell the tickets?" she yelled toward her friend.
"I didn't need to! If we go now we can leave on the next boat for Kumquat Island!"
Jennifer turned to Polly. "Come on, guys," said Polly. "You just need a little longer to appreciate--"
"That's not the problem Polly!" yelled Jennifer. "The problem is you."

Polly stared silently at Jennifer as she got out of the water and gathered her things. Jennifer called out her gligar and then took one last look at Polly who had an extremely saddened look on her face. Jennifer grabbed on to her gligar's tail that flew her up to the top of the hill where Klaare was standing.

"What's wrong?" asked Klaare. "Why's Polly still down there?"
"She's not coming," Jennifer replied. C'mon, we're going to miss our boat." Jennifer walked off towards the other side of the island as Klaare looked back and waved. Polly waved at Klaare wiping tears from her eyes. When the hand left her face, Klaare had gone following right behind Jennifer.

"Kingdra, return." Polly beamed her Pokemon back into its pokeball and swam back to the shore. Polly sat on the shore watching the waves move back and forth for hours on end tears falling from her face. In the waves, a small, blue, shining object floated towards the shore, however Polly paid no attention to it as she wept on. As it drew nearer, two of Polly's pokeballs began to rattle more and more as it got closer. Finally, Polly looked down at the belt to see what was going on and discovered that the pokeballs making the ruckus where the ones containing Vaporeon and Kingdra. "Fine," she said to the two Pokemon. "Go ahead and leave me too."

Polly released the two Pokemon in to the water and then continued her sobbing. The two Pokemon floated in the water and cried out to the egg. The red spot on the lower part of the egg blinked, seemingly signifying the two Pokemon to come closer. Polly watched as her two Pokemon swam on towards the egg, and she stood up when the got to it.

"What are they doing?" she asked herself, her tears drying.
Kingdra followed Vaporeon to the egg, where Vaporeon picked it with its tail fin, and Kingdra turned around and used Surf to make waves go in the opposite direction to make it easier for Vaporeon to swim back to shore.

By now Polly's tears had dried up and she stood their watching her Pokemon. "Why are they doing that?" she asked herself. "What's that thing that Vaporeon is carrying?"

When Vaporeon got to shore, Kingdra stopped using surf, and swam back to shore too. When Kingdra got as close as it could get. Vaporeon handed the egg to Polly. "What's this?"

"The prince of the sea: Manafi!" cried Vaporeon and Kingdra simultaneously.

"Whatever," said Polly, shrugging. Polly set the egg down on the sand and returned Vaporeon and Kingdra to their pokeballs. "Whatever it is," said Polly after sighing and picking up the egg. "They think it's important. Guess it must be. I hope this egg doesn

EROWR I love it! I honestly didn't really see anything in it. The only thing that I can see is the story line may be well not cliche but a bit of a mary-sueish. But sometimes the beginning is like that and in the end it isn't. So the only thing I can say is be careful of that.

<font color="999999">mmm! religion and death! my favorites!

I like this story, kinda resembles another one I read TIME ago (I think) oh I dont remember; it maybe wasn

<font color="999999">Well, I might say I kinda liked this stage also, but then again there are some issues arround; y

((Gets better next part, I promise!))

“We made it!”

Kel’s skarmory flew down to the shore as everyone else’s pokemon also began to gather on the beach. When they all stepped foot on the sand, they showed signs of thanks to their pokemon, and returned them to their pokeballs. Afterwards they turned around and began to walk towards the pokemon center, but Karth stopped when she noticed a group of birds in the distance.

“Why are all those taillows and pidgies over there?”

Karth pointed up at the seven pidgies flying in a formation, as if welcoming a very important celebrity. “What are they doing?” she asked her friends. They, too, looked up and stared at the impressive show the bird pokemon put on for them.

“Aww…” said Radman in an especially goofy voice. “I feel speciol. Dey wuv us!” Radman assumed that the bird pokemon were welcoming them, and began running towards them, with Barry and Jack following close behind. Eloise, on the other hand, stared at the birds for a little bit. Eventually, she called Radman to come back.

“Radman! They aren’t welcoming us!” The three boys stopped, turned around, and started running back. When they got back to the group, Barry asked Eloise “How can you tell?”

“They’re off center.” Everyone in the group immediately turned around and stared at the birds for a couple of second, and then agreed. “Then who are the performing for?” Karth asked confusedly. By this time, the birds had landed on the ground, and each had their heads bent down as a sign of respect towards the Prince of the Sea. Kel looked over at the birds and saw two trainers, a boy and a girl, with a fainted Vaporeon and typhlosion in between them. “I think it is them.” Kel said, pointing to the scene he had seen.

“I think I know her!” Eloise exclaimed. She began running towards the ended battle in hopes of seeing whom she expected to see. Dumbfounded, the rest of them shrugged and decided to follow.

“Polly!” she said waving her arm in the air.

Polly turned from watching the show to see one of her long lost friends running towards her. “Eloise!”

The two friends ran up to each other and embraced, so very glad to see each other after so long.

“Eloise, how have you been?”
“Great! I have to watch over these guys, but still, great!”
“That’s great!”
“Great!”

The two girls stopped talking for a second, and after about 15 seconds of awkward silence, the two friends broke out in laughter.

“Who are you?” asked the strange boy, still in his trench coat disguise and suit case in hand.

“Wait…” Eloise muttered to herself. She walked towards the strange boy and began to circle around him, the boy standing and watching her.

“What’re you doing?” he asked nervously.

“Is that typhlosion yours?” she asked.
“Yes…”
“Do you by any chance have a magnemite and/or magneton?”
“Yes…”

Eloise stopped circling him. “Mmhmm…” she nodded. She began to walk away for a second, then jumped back and pulled off his hat, removing the shadow and revealing his face.

“Darren!” “Eloise!” both Eloise and the strange man exclaimed simultaneously.
“Darren?” Karth asked.
“Yeah, you remember,” replied Eloise. “Darren would always be at the Kanto League battles we watched. When he became a trainer, his starter was a Cyndaquil, and he was always talking about how his dream was to catch a magnemite…”

Karth thought for a moment, and then the light bulb went on. “Oh yeah, I remember him!” Karth then put an angry face on. She walked up to Darren and slapped him on the shoulder.

“Ow! What’s your problem?” he asked, annoyed, rubbing his arm.
“At my first Kanto League battle, you got the last dragonair plushy!”
“So?”
“So dragonair is one of my favorite pokemon! Lucky for you I have a real one now!”
“Suuuuuuuuure. I’d battle you, but my pokemon are tired from beating Polly.” Darren smiled a cocky smile as Polly gasped and put her angry face on.

“Fine!” she said, turning her head away from him. “Because my pokemon got whooped so badly, I’ll show these guys around the island, and you can just get lost.” Polly returned her Vaporeon to its pokeball and remembered something. She looked at the little pokemon all the birds were greeting and picked it up.

“What’s that?” asked Jack.
“I…don’t really know.” Polly chuckled. “I found it in the water right after…” Polly’s tear ducts began to fill up. “Right before Jennifer and Klaare deserted me here.” Polly was now bawling into her hands. Manaphy floated up next to her and gave her a hug. Polly looked up and saw the small blue pokemon showing affection.

“Thanks. You’re really nice.” Manaphy smiled and sat on Polly’s head, causing her to laugh.

“C’mon guys. I’ll show you all to the pokemon center.” Polly happily walked to the Pokemon Center, with her brand new friend sitting on her head. As they walked Polly remembered something.

“What kind of pokemon are you?” Allegra asked.
“Manaphy!” Manaphy giggled and hugged Allegra tightly.
Allegra giggled back and then thought for a moment. “Samara…”

Radman chuckled a bit. “What kind of name is that?”

Allegra stuck her tongue out at Radman. “It’s my favorite name! My favorite name, to my new favorite friend!” Allegra held Manaphy tightly as she ran towards the pokemon center in happiness, forgetting about her deserting friends Jennifer and Klaare.

This story has been DROPPED.

I do not want to continue writing it, however, if you like my writing style, I WILL be writing another pokemon story, starting in May. The reason I want to start in May is because it will be a pokemon journey story, and it will star real people, so I just want my friend to get DP first, and then be associated with all the DP pokemon, so he can tell me the pokemon he will want to have in this story.

Also, I just wanted you guys to know the whole story of what happens. In this story, this would be like a movie of the main series, but when I start writing my new story in May, it will have both the "main series" and the "movies", all condensed into one topic, divided up into segments, with links at the beginning of each segment in the first post.

For now, you will all have to live with this.