O.K. This is my first story so if you have complaints SHUT UP! [sorry ].
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It all started when Dan cahgt [woops! I spellt it wrong] Kyogre. It kept
useing attacks that don't exist. Dan:"Kyogre,what's going on?!" said Dan one day.Kyogre:"Kyoooouuuu!". As if things could'nt get wierder,all of Dan's pok'emon acted weird.

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Sorry, but that's all for now.

Kyogre356.



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Dan called Prof.Brich for help. Brich:"I really don't know what is with Kyogre."Dan:"It not just ,it's all my pok'emon!"Brich:"EVEN THE SCREPTILE I GAVE YOU AND THE VENASAUR OAK GAVE YOU!?!!!" Dan:"Yes." Brich:"This is serus!"


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sorry, my post is short! [I edited.]



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Brich:"Sorry,I have to go,bye!". Then,May comes by and says "I herd that you stopded Kyogre and Groundoun.But,I just want a battle." Dan:"O.K." May:Go! !" Dan:Go! ! May:" ! Wing Attack!" Dan: ! Doge it and use Hidden Power!" it was a 1 hit K.O! May: return! Go Dan: ! Return! Go! ! May:Stun Spore!" :"Grfoo!"Dan:" Groundoun! Return! Go! " ! :"Raquoa!!!" Dan:" Hyper Beam!" was done for.May: ! Return! Go, !" Dan: ! Reutrn! Go, !" May:"Grown..." Dan: "{kyogre} ! Surf!" BINGO!!!!!!!!! was done for!
May:" You deserve these." May had given Dan 4 tikets. Dan:"Thanks, but, were do they go to?" May:"Go find out!" So Dan went to Slaport to get to the S.S tidal and got to island 8. Dan and
decided to use surf and they got to Navle Rock. They got to a fork Dan:"lets go up." and Dan and were surprised to find . Dan:" , Hydro Pump!" 's H.P was weak enogh to ceatch.Dan:" you are mine!" he theuogh a Ultra Ball and caght . Then Dan and went to the other side. There was Dan:"Go! ! Use Slash and then use Secret Power!" had 1 H.P so Dan used a Ultra Ball and sucseeded.

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was that!?



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Posts merged.
~Galar

Instead of opening new topics to add new parts of your fanfic, please use only one thread to post new chapters. All you have to do is come to this thread and click "Add New Reply", and then post the new chapters.

I'm deleting the other topics, but I'll be editing this thread, so you can have all your story parts in one single post. Next time, either edit your first post to add new chapters or add new replies.

Watch out as your chapters are very short and poor. Maybe if you can develop your story a bit more people will eventually post their opinions on it. If you still have any doubts, please feel free to PM me.

very cool but the pokemon would probably would not faint on first hit but i do like the picture they kind of spice it up a bit though so 8/10

Sorry it took me!
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Then, he flew back on . Dan:"Of to 9 island!" he got to the ship. Dan looked around the island when he came across a trangle. It burst open! apperd. Dan:"Go ! Use Surf and then waterfall and Slash!" "Kabodda!" :"Mmona!" used Toxic! Dan:" return! Go ! Use Dig!" :"Trio trio trio!"
:"?!?!" :Trio!!!!!" hit ! But
used Toxic. Dan:" return! Go ! Hidden Power! Go Ultra Ball!" was cahgt! Dan:"Next stop, Sothern Island!" Dan left to Sothern Island. He explored the island and saw a sighn next to a forest. Dan:"If you beleve...Hey! that's all?!" Dan enterd the forest. To his surprise he
saw 2 eggs with notes. Dan:"Draems come true...You will not forget this! Wait a second...If you beleve dreams come true you wont foget this!" Then, came out the eggs! Dan"Go! and ! , Fire Blast on ! Hydro Pump on !"
was caght but didn't faint. Dan:"Fire Blast again!" was caght!
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Please make suggestions, comments, etc.

Its a good plot but a little rushed...try to space it out a little more.
It was a little hard to believe all these legendairies just started to appear from no where. And i highly doubt he could catch it on his first ball it took me seven ultra balls to catch Groudon, 4 to catck kyogre, 5 to catch raquaza, 8 to catch regi rock, 6 to catch reggi ice and i used 12 on regi steel but still had to use my luxery ball after failing with three premeir balls!

P.s Yes i know kyogre is cool!

Sorry Marowak550! [ ]
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The next day and evolved into and {porygon 2} . :"Well, there is 1 more island, so lt's go!" Dan:" has a point. come on!" Dan went to Faraway island. Dan:"Hey! It's just a forest! Well, no sense in not exploreing!" :"I have a bad feeling about this!" hesitated. Dan:"Hey' , do you get the feeling were being watched?" :"Yes." Then, as soon as it started, ran past Dan and . :"We need a lot of speed! "
Dan:"No problemo! Go !" Dan hoped on Dan:"After
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Will Dan ceacth ? Tell ya later!

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Dan:"Go! {porygon 2} !" {porygon 2} :"Pory2! Pory2!" Dan:"I think I'll add !" :"Kyougrrrre!" Dan:" , Waterfall! {porygon 2} , Hyper Beam!" Both critacal hits! Dan thghout Mew was waek enogh, so he throgh a Ultra Ball. A miss! Then , used the most powefull attack ever! Then, as soon as it started, hurtuled out it's Pokeball and used Mirror Coat![ lovers will obliterate me!] fainted! Dan got Mew, but his Pokemon used real attacks again.




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[Or is it?]

ur dam rite we will grrrrrrrrrrr *obliterate* now ur dead how do u like them apples.

Can a porygon use Fly?
I will make it my life's work to find out.

A little short of a storey and they just STOPED usin the weird attacks
And dan had to many pokemon he had : 1. porygon, 2. haunter, 3. dugtrio, 4. unkown 5. kyogre 6. groundon 7. kabutops 8. rayquaza [spelt wrong}8.Armaldo and you never said he went to a PC

I just made Dan jump on .
P.S:Porygons float.

SLOW DOWN THE PLOT!!!!!!!!!!! I mean, good idea with using wierd attacks, but you have some serious spelling and grammar errors (yes I know I am not the grammar and spelling king but still) and using the emoticons instead of writing the words down is complicated and hard to follow. if you can shape up then i will continue reading