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Crimson
Pokemon Ranger
Joined: Sun May 07, 2006 2:33 pm Posts: 716 Location: USA EST
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This is a short one-shot, it's basically a perspective story.
Rating: E
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People always say doll eyes are dead, I find them, unlike people, to be full of life. Dolls are perfect, in everything. The only times they aren
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Banov
Dragon Tamer
Joined: Tue Jun 06, 2006 8:14 pm Posts: 149 Location: PA, USA
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Very nice *claps*
A little creepy and scary and whatnot, but for only a few paragraphds you control the reader's emotions to perfection. Normally I'd say it needs length, but the shortness while still ebign good is actually one of its good points.. plus, adding onto length may change the effect.
*applause*
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Mon Jul 10, 2006 2:37 pm |
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Crimson
Pokemon Ranger
Joined: Sun May 07, 2006 2:33 pm Posts: 716 Location: USA EST
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Thank you very much.
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Mon Jul 10, 2006 2:43 pm |
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Banov
Dragon Tamer
Joined: Tue Jun 06, 2006 8:14 pm Posts: 149 Location: PA, USA
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Um, you're welcome? ![Razz :P](./images/smilies/icon_razz.gif)
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Mon Jul 10, 2006 2:48 pm |
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Crimson
Pokemon Ranger
Joined: Sun May 07, 2006 2:33 pm Posts: 716 Location: USA EST
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No I was sincere about that, people normally read my work and just move on without saying anything. ![Heart <3](./images/smilies/icon_heart.gif)
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Banov
Dragon Tamer
Joined: Tue Jun 06, 2006 8:14 pm Posts: 149 Location: PA, USA
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That's true for everyone, unfortunatley...
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daveshan
Pokemon Master
Joined: Thu Nov 03, 2005 2:23 pm Posts: 1959 Location: Va
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It is good, don't get me wrong. It's just that, I've seen too many Twilight Zones, Outer Limits, or read too many scary stories about dolls to see this as anything but good.
I did like that you threw me for a loop at the end. I was expecting you to have the doll look in the miror for the first time and discover that it's either very ugly or it's something other than a doll.
Still, it was good.
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Crimson
Pokemon Ranger
Joined: Sun May 07, 2006 2:33 pm Posts: 716 Location: USA EST
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I think you may be confused Dave. The 'doll' is a human, she's in an asylum because she thinks she's a doll. So I guess you expected correctly.
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daveshan
Pokemon Master
Joined: Thu Nov 03, 2005 2:23 pm Posts: 1959 Location: Va
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Oh.
I see that now, cool, then.
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mudkipman
Ace Trainer
Joined: Sat May 27, 2006 1:26 am Posts: 389 Location: Hiding behind a rock 'cuz you're ugly
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Wow, you like to write stories about dolls, even though this one was kinda a human, but still, I like your stories, very very fun to read
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Fri Jul 14, 2006 12:58 am |
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Crimson
Pokemon Ranger
Joined: Sun May 07, 2006 2:33 pm Posts: 716 Location: USA EST
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I went through this phase where I was obsessed with them. In total though I only wrote 3 stories about them.
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