Well, this will be my new Fanfic when I get to it. Once again, members can be in it if they want, however you you must PM me.

I do want to say, expect a lot. And I will be playing the bad guy. And even though some parts include some intense moments, that could be played out here, I'm in no way corrupt, for those of you who are worried. This Fanfic is my imagination, so you needn't worry, I won't be using Psypoke for world domination.

Soon, I can have the banner up, and hopefully it'll look nice.

Joining The Fanfic

Note: THIS IS NOT AN ROLEPLAY

To join this fanfic, you must PM me with some details. Hopefully, I can work on that template soon, so keep with me.

You can make up all the information in your "profile", except for the parts in which you'll see an astericks placed.

*Username:
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Name:
Age:
Personality:
Bad Good
^When PMing me, put one in bold red text
Username:
Your Website: (you can "have a website" that takes place in this fanfic)
Websites you are joined to: (made up)
Status's on those Websites: (User, Moderator, Administrator)
Website Allies:
Website Enemies:

* Your information on Psypoke

If this fanfic is successful, we can have a second version as a Roleplay.

I'm tweaking some details, so please bare with me.

Your name and age or created by you. However your Username, the first one, is your username here, so I know who you are.

In this fanfic, you are allowed to have a website. This website is totally fake, and only expressed in the fanfic.

Seeing as there are many websites on the net, many websites both good and evil will "join together to abolish the other". So you may be a user on multiple sites. This is also made up.

Status on those websites: this is your status on the sites. On one you may be an Admin, and the other you may be a plain user. You choose. 8)

Website allies: if you do "create" your own website, you can have affiliates they will act as your allies, to join together to beat the other sites. You can have multiple allies. I have something planned in the story.

Website Enemies: same thing as above, sort of. If you have your own website, you could be against another. Say someone created an anti-Pokemon site. And a Pokemon fan site heard, they would become enemies. But be reminded, this will be more intense in the story.

I hope this clears some things up.

The Internet. Connecting computers around the world. It's used for numerous things, in which you can choose. You can download music, start a website, or use it for research. It can be used for much eviller things, which was considered absurd, until now.

A unwritten book, states, "He whom controls the Internet, controls the world." For ages, this made people nervous. What if the Internet fell into the wrong hands? What could happen? This was considered immpossible, until now.

Administrators, webmasters, whatever you want to call them, it's your choice. They have power. Laws that protect you at home, or at school, don't protect you here. If you are here, you are vulnerable. Unless you had a firewall, which anyone could have one, until now.

It's the year 2065. My foruteenth birthday was three weeks ago. There was no party, no cake. But their were presents. Boy were their presents. The latest software, the latest technology ever integrated into computers was put into my hands. How it got there, I don't know.

I recieved the package on Wednesday, the UPS guy gave me the usual, papers to sign. Except his eyes wouldn't leave me, nor the package. After we were finished, he left. I went into my den in my cellar. It should be safe. With a total of twelve sentry guns in the ceiling, reinforced concrete walls, and 5 feet of solid steel, I should be able to survive opening this blasted thing.

I did it carefully, I went into my lab on the other end of my den. Anthrax? No too early, they tried that last week. Whatever it was, I was ready. Well, unless magically several pounds of C4 appeared just as opened the package. I had it scanned before it entered the house. But no such substances were found, and teleportation was in the BETA stage, meaning newly developed. Teleportation had just been invented, the scientists discovered their contraption worked, when one of them tripped, and slammed into the on button. Nobody let them forget that, even today, seven months later.

Anyway, I started unwrapping the package. Carefully, constantly looking at my monitor, which constantly monitored the room. If anything was there, I would know before it had a chance to do anything. I finished unwrapping it. A fully built computer? It seemed all I had to do was plug in the cords, and bam, I was there.

I did thus, in the most guarded (yet comfortable) part of my den. As I started it, it asked me many questions. I used my usual Internet profile.

Let's see, Username: Truestar. E-Mail: truestar@truestarforums.com Password: ****** Then that message popped up, the one that would change my life.

Would you like to commence Hard Drive transfer? What the? It's not that I didn't understand, but all I did was plug it in, and it new I had another computer? I clicked yes, why wouldn't I? I'd be flat out stupid not too. Well, so I thought. I clicked the mouse, (which also came already installed), then the weirdest thing happened. The screen flashed bright colors, red, blue, green, yellow, continuously. I was getting dizzier by the second. Then a red beam eminated, and I thought it was taking a scan of my eye. I got too dizzy and collapsed.

I woke up hours later. 10:00 pm? What the? Then I remembered. The computer! I stood up, and there it was. Revolution. In dark blue. Revolution? It didn't make sense, until I logged in.

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I apologise all, our keyboard is crappy, so the keys stick, and sometimes letters won't register. So as I type fast spelling errors may occur, if they do, PM me the sentence, and I'll fix it.

But do you all like it? I hope I offered just enough information to get you interested, yet leave you hanging. Any predictions?

Nice. Very different idea from the usual fanfic. Creativity is good, you know.

And kudos to your website's mission/goal/blahblah. Quite useful. Probably not what I'll be studying, but nice idea anyway!

8/10 on the fanfic, simply because I'm cranky and tired and writing that "10" is an extra digit.

Oops, did I say that?

I mean, nothing is perfect!

ehehe...

-S-

I was kind of hoping for some comments. Anybody else?

(Thanks swift, even though you were tired. )

looks interesting.....
I want to see more of it before I give my opinion.

I have some excellent ideas, that will make this story additcive, well, so I hope.

-"Czarek, Josef, come on." called Mark, as they walked out of Starbucks.
-"Coming, hold on!" seconds later one male, and a female came out to join Mark.
-"What next?" asked Czarek.
-"I want to go home." moaned Mark. "You guys can come too."
-"Great, maybe we can log on today!" Josef peeped up. The three have recently joined together, and are creating a website. Today should be the day, where they are confirmed, and can start up.
-"Do you have everything?" Czarek questioned Mark.
-Mark grinned as he pulled out a disc, "Yep. Everything's ready. I also included a set up file explaining how to set up the forum, and the java for the chats."
-"Great!"

-They prowled down the streets of New York City, heading for the subway which would take them to the outskirts, where Mark lived.

-They made it just before dark and they were relieved, they felt better when they left the city before it got too dark. Of course, the lights really defeat the purpose of night time in the big city.

-As they walked down the sidewalk to Mark's house, the trio discussed the website. They had worked for one full year to create the files, and pre-mod the forum for their website. They were excited, for there was no flaw. They also saved a total of $679 for their web-host. Of course, it wasn't that expensive, but they relaxed knowing a good several years of great hosting was already covered.

-"Mark, did you install that stas mod?" Czarek quesitoned.
-"Yeah, I ran into some troubles though, one of Psypoke's admins helped me." he continued, "I did get it installed though, I ran it on my dads server and everything seemed okay."
-"Cool." Czarek seemed satisfied, Czarek was the true computer geek, not to mention the prime problem solver of the group.

-They planned on creating their website about mythology. The Greeks, to the Romans, and even to the occasional modern myth. They were specialists, and they knew it.

-"Hey Czarek, you remember that myth I told you about the other day?"
-"Yeah, can you write something up on that? I'm sure the viewers would have a blast." she smilied.

-Funny though, these teens will soon find out, that you should read into something, before stating it as a myth...





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Basically you're meeting the main characters, you've pretty much met them. There's only a few to meet, but they come in in quite awhile. I'd pay attention to the very last line. You should better get thinking if you plan to continue to folllow along.

"-They made it, just before dark, and they were relieved, they felt better when they left the city before it got too dark. Of course, the lights really defeat the purpose of night time in the big city."

Too many commas, the wording here can be condensed so the flow is better.

"-"Mark, did you install that stas mod?" Czarek quesitoned.
-"Yeah, I ran into some troubles though, one of Psypoke's admins helped me." he continued, "I did get it installed though, I ran it on my dads server, and everything seemed okay."
-"Cool." Czarek seemed satisfied, Czarek was the true computer geek, not to mention the prime problem solver of the group. "

It's generally not a good idea to say outright what role/steriotype a character is. Please lay off the commas too.

"They were specialists, and they knew it."

I should hope so.

"-"Hey Czarek, you remember that myth I told you about the other day?"
-"Yeah, can you write something up on that? I'm sure the viewers would have a blast." she smilied.

-Funny though, these teens will soon find out, that you should read into something, before stating it as a myth... "

Forced cliffhanger/10

In all honesty though I've seen a lot worse, though until these errors improve I'm gonna have to give you a 6/10.

Fixed.

As for your comments, I have to agree. I seem to fall in love with commas when it comes to writing. I really don't try, and it is something I need to fix.

Thanks Teenage.

np, you're a lot better than most of the stuff I review.

I clicked the log in button. This is definitely the weirdest thing that has ever happened to me. I thought about everything How could it be physically possible for the data to transfer if I have everything on seperate servers? Everything is running on it's own power. I had no idea, but then again I was excited. I've been having this feeling something big is about to happen. I can't explain, but all I know is it will change the world, and I'm a part of it.

Truth is, everything's been weird lately. I don't know how to explain it. My grades have skyrocketed. Staright 100's in everything, I'm becoming physically fit. I don't know why. I have been working out, but these results are amazing. I'm also surprised at some of my grades. I'm in the 9th grade, and for many this is the toughest year. But then again I wouldn't know, seeing as I get special classes here in my own sanctum.

My "tutor" is odd. Ever since he came he's been on to me. My family went missing 4 years ago, and he said I need to be prepared. Mentally, physically, and emotionally. I of course asked for what, but his response is always, "The coming of the prophet." God forbid he tells me who this prophet is.

But, I took this all to heart. Now here I am. My heart is cold and I can't feel emotions as much as I used to. My body is in shape to the point where I could fool an enemy with my timid appearance, yet kill him in three moves. And I can sort out my thoughts much easier. I'm impressed.

Others should be more like me, but then again having this advantage is great. You see, the world is different now than it was 50 years ago. Governments have changed, cultures have adjusted and adapted to the new environments.

Government. The 2065 Webster's definition of corruption is practically: the USA Government. It's crazy, so much has happened. We're invading countries left and right, creating alliances with other nations, and keep our noses in others business. Which would explain the nuclear missle striking New York City 10 years ago. Indeed, the world is in chaos. Luckily, not many were hurt. Thankfully the CIA and FBI actually agreed to work together to get everybody in shelters. For once.

But, this is how it was meant to be. Darwin explained survival of the fittest several decades ago. Obviously 2065 is it's prime example.

Then you have people like me. Special people. No I'm not talking about the short blue bus, I'm talking about those people who are different. Few flaws, politicians at ten; I am one of them. And apparently, this time I've been waiting for is here.

I got to the desktop. Very quickly I might add. The computer is amazing. All my personal preferences are here. So many new features, and then I saw it. The icon: Revolution. I double clicked, and the world was put in my hands.

Okay...I've been busy and this thing has gotten 218...er 219 views...so I'm guessing people would like it to continue?

will there be pokemon in this storey.................i haven't yet read it fully

No, there will not be yet another pogeymanz fanfic.